(via http://www.slashfilm.com/wp/wp-content/images/ouija1.jpg)Good evening. It's that time again for 5 Minutes of Horror, the radio show that will chill your soul and rattle your minds. Sit back and don't relax.
MUSIC: EERIE THEME
ANNOUNCER: THEY CAME BY NIGHT! Designed to free you from the four walls of today for five minutes of HORROR!
MUSIC: "MIDNIGHT AT THE TOP OF THE STAIRS" ...
ANNOUNCER: You are standing in inky blackness - looking up a long flight of stairs, at the top of which lurks something unbelievably evil. Out of the moving shadows behind you, coming closer to you, is the shadowy figure of something that could only come from - a nightmare.
MUSIC: OUT
ANNOUNCER: Listen now as 5 MINUTES OF HORROR brings you Jade's terrifying story, "They Came By Night!"
MUSIC: FADE IN “The Killing Moon by Echo & The Bunnymen”
SOUND: CLINK OF SILVERWARE
ANNOUNCER: It is December of 1992. Jules, a 23-year-old medical student from Michigan is home from Johns Hopkins University for the holiday season. She arrived yesterday. Jules’ mother is quite concerned since the time of her arrival, as Jules has been acting a bit distant.
MUSIC: OUT
FX: FOOTSTEPS
DIANE: Jules, what’re you doing out here? Come inside, it’s freezing and time for dinner.
JULES: Mom, I’ll be inside in just a minute.
FX: FOOTSTEPS, CREAK OF WOOD
ANNOUNCER: Last semester, while hanging out with some less conservative friends, Jules decided to try her luck with an Ouija board. Unfortunately for Jules and her friends, the Ouija board that they acquired wasn’t made by Mattel or Milton Bradley. Jules has since been plagued by whatever it is that she contacted that night.
FX: RUSTLE OF WIND
SHADOWS: Jules, are you ready to play again?
SHADOWS: Don’t ignore me, Jules. I know everything. I see everything. I will follow you wherever you go until I get what I want.
JULES: (screaming) What do you want?
SHADOWS: Why, you, of course. What, you think coming home to mommy and daddy will save you? You must have forgotten that it was you that first contacted me. And now you want to get rid of me?
JULES: This is impossible.
JULES: (screaming) Mom, come quick.
FX: LIGHT SOBBING
DIANE: What is it, Jules?
JULES: I know this is going to sound absolutely insane. A few friends and I were studying for a test a few weeks back, and we decided to try our luck with a Ouija board – purely out of boredom.
DIANE: (interrupting) Jules, are you stupid? Did I not raise you better than that, than to mess with that evil?
JULES: Mom, I know, I just didn’t think any of it was real. But real or not, we messed up – something came through.
SHADOWS: Jules, what did I tell you about mentioning our game to anyone else?
JULES: Mom, did you hear that?
DIANE: Hear what, Jules?
JULES: This isn’t happening. This can’t be real. Mom, help me.
DIANE: Jules?
SHADOWS: Jules, what you’re about to experience will probably be the most real thing you’ve ever encountered. Say goodbye to your mother now, Julesy. You won’t be seeing her again.
JULES: (shrilling) Mom!
FX: SCREAMING, LOUD THUDS, DOOR SLAMMING
I like the backstory you set up and the "Julesy" addition at the end. I also like the fact that the 'they' in your story are shadows...a Hitchcock twist which allows your readers to imagine the terror. The dialog works as it sounds natural. I like how you leave it up to the listener's imagination how Julesy will die.
ReplyDeleteOoo, that was creepy. I played with a Ouija bored when I was younger, and it scared the crap out of all of us. This brings back memories :)
ReplyDeleteThe "Say goodbye to your mother" part gave me the heebiejeebies, great job!
I really liked the idea of the Ouija board. Those things are pretty scary and mess with your head. I enjoyed the ending and the part Say goodbye to your mother!.. Good Job.
ReplyDeleteThe FX thing was a great idea to give the listener a more detailed idea as to what is going on throughout the whole thing. I have never messed with a Ouija board, im kind of interested though. I like the shadow and thuds the best made the imagination flow.
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