They Came by Night
Good evening. It's that time again for 5 Minutes of Horror, the radio show that will chill your soul and rattle your minds. Sit back and don't relax.
MUSIC: EERIE THEME
ANNOUNCER: THEY CAME BY NIGHT! Designed to free you from the four walls of today for five minutes of HORROR!
MUSIC: "MIDNIGHT AT THE TOP OF THE STAIRS" ...
ANNOUNCER: You are standing in inky blackness - looking up a long flight of stairs, at the top of which lurks something unbelievably evil. Out of the moving shadows behind you, coming closer to you, is the shadowy figure of something that could only come from - a nightmare.
MUSIC: OUT
ANNOUNCER: Listen now as 5 MINUTES OF HORROR brings you Francesca’s terrifying story, "They Came By Night"!
MUSIC: A FAST HEARTBEATING RHYTHM
NARRATOR: Sandy is in the house of the baby she sits for. She is alone and the parents of the child will not be back for another hour.
SOUND: A KNOCK AT THE FRONT DOOR…
SANDY SAYS TO HERSELF: Who could that be at this time of the night? I hope the baby did not wake up.
NARRATOR: Sandy walks over to the front door and looks through the peep hole. There is nobody there, so she turns away….
SOUND: CRIES OF THE BABY
SANDY SAYS TO HERSELF: Ugh, I knew that would happen!
MUSIC: SOFT LULLABYES
NARRATOR: Sandy walks toward the room of the baby. She is awake and standing in her crib. She looks scared and seems to be afraid of lying in her crib again. Sandy takes her out and starts to rock her in her arms.
SANDY SAYS TO THE BABY: Do not worry Lily, Mommy and Daddy will be home soon. There is nothing to be afraid of. Look, it is your little stuffed cow Gracie. Do you want to sleepies with her?
NARRATOR: Sandy hands the child her stuffed animal and the baby is content once again. She goes off to sleep with the stuffed animal in hand…
SOUND: THE PHONE RINGS
NARRATOR: Sandy goes to answer the phone. She is relieved that it is Lily’s parents, and they say they are coming home now from the party.
SANDY SAYS INTO THE PHONE: Yes, everything is fine. Thank you, see you in a bit!
SOUND: TRASH CANS FALLING OVER
NARRATOR: Sandy looks out one of the windows. Being cautious, and a little scared, she looks through the blinds to be unnoticed.
MUSIC: “PSYCHO” MUSIC: HIGH PITCH
NARRATOR: There is again nobody outside. She turns her head. As she does, she thinks she sees a shadow out of the corner of her eye. She looks again, but nothing is there.
SOUND: CRICK OF THE BABY’S DOOR
NARRATOR: Sandy starts to walk into the baby’s room. She feels like she is being watched. She looks into the crib. Panic strikes her face.
MUSIC: SLOW, DARK PIANO
MUSIC: SLOW, DARK PIANO
NARRATOR: Sandy does not see the stuffed cow in the crib. She looks all around the room it, but it just isn’t there.
SOUND: LILY’S PARENTS WALKING IN THE FRONT DOOR
NARRATOR: Sandy leaves the room, leaving the baby to sleep. She walks out and sees the stuffed cow on the floor. She is very confused and does not remember bringing it out of the room. She sees Lily’s mom go into Lil’s room and her husband pulls out his check book. As he does, Sandy sees a shadowy figure behind him. As they stand there the shadow gets closer…
SOUND: SANDY SCREAMING
Good use of the present tense to establish the tension in your narration. Are there more shadows to describe the "they" in "they came by night?"
ReplyDeleteI love the music that is used throughout the narration. It creates curiosity and keeps the reader focused on what happens next. The further i read the more anxious i became to find out what happens next. Great Job! What was the baby's name?
ReplyDeleteI really got into your story and you kept my attention throughout. I was a little confused in the end because it seemed like a lot was going on. I liked the descriptive music too! Good job!
ReplyDeleteI must say, I was really impressed with your work. I was at the edge of my seat the entire time. The only thing I can really say you did incorrectly, or should have left out was the beginning part of your radio script, I don't think you were supposed to copy and paste everything from the example given to us, you were only supposed to copy and paste the introduction. Other than this slight error, I am very impressed with your skills. Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteI think you did a great job completeing this post. I liked the music/ sound effects that you choose i believe they would really make the story intense. Great Post.
ReplyDeleteI loved how you used something that is easily relatable to. I used to babysitt all the time! I really wish we could have finished these though..Overall great job!
ReplyDeleteThe radio broadcast was great. You accomplished everything we wanted you to do. The only thing i woudl change would maybe describe the emotions of the character a lot more to give the listener more of an idea what the girl is feeling. Loved the music selection.
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