Title: Horror Nights
Music: Thriller
Announcer: 5 Kids walking through Central Park on their way to the biggest Halloween party. They hear screams and laughter and their anxiety builds
Music: Slow and dreary
ANnouncer: Everything goes silent but the screams scatter and fall one after another. They follow the screams further and further into the dark park.
Music: Loud Organs
Announcer: One of the kids dissappears while the other four continue walking. They get picked off one by one in the dark park
Music: Party in the USA
Announcer: All five kids are thrown into the middle of the park and everything lights up. THey made it to the party.
Your picture, setting (theme park), and music choice (particularly the organ sound) was definitely a great recipe for a scare! I really like the image of the kids vanishing one by one into the dark. Of course I definitely think this could have been more developed; the beginning could have been beefed up a little with more of an introduction and dialogue with the characters. I think you could have really added many more elements to them vanishing, it seemed to have happened out of nowhere by nothing. However, the idea and story itself is really great = ) I especially loved the ending! I loved when you wrote that "they made it to the party" - definitely a great cliff hanger! Pretty sick dude!
ReplyDeleteWhat!?! We weren't supposed to know if they made it or not! Oh well still a nice touch with Thriller music. I liked when the kids were being picked off one by one but I wish you would have elaborated a little bit more on that.
ReplyDeleteDetail and development needed...you're slacking again, Mr. C.
ReplyDeleteGreat choice with the music and picture. You need to make it longer, and the ending is supposed to be suspansful, don't tell us that they made it to the party. Good story idea, just develope it more.
ReplyDeleteThat was hilarious! I agree with some of the above. You could have developed more of story to make it great. I loved the music selection, the photo and the basic story.
ReplyDeleteI agree I want to know what happens!!! This could have been a great thriller if it had been more developed. I like how your music choice was different from everyones, it was creative.
ReplyDeleteThe music choice was the best element to your story, although it seemed as if the only thing there was music element, this needs to be a 5 minute horror skit, 300-500 words. I like the idea of the story but it needs more detail to say the least.
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