Wednesday, November 4, 2009

Samantha Blog Post 4


Announcer:
Good evening. It's that time again for 5 Minutes of Horror, the radio show that will chill your soul and rattle your minds. Sit back and don't relax.



Narration Provided by Michael Jackson's Thriller- Vincent Price


Music:

Eerie theme music


Narrator:

It was midnight, maybe later; Darkness leaves no hint what the hour may be.


Sound: Ocean waves russel the shells on shore; whispering.

Music: none for the remainder of the story


Narrator:

A man is startled awake in his home not far from the shore.

It was another nightmare he has become accustomed to since the death of his twin daughters.

Barely a year ago they had drowned at sea. First one, then the other.

After a week's search, no bodies were found.


The man, Jonathon has since moved from the home he and his since divorced wife had raised their daughters but could not stand to be away from the sea.


Sound: Only the sound of the waves, the whispering shells and Jon's heavy breathing.


Narrator:

Sweat drips down his fatigued face.

Without turning the lights on Jon makes his way down the stairs and into the kitchen.

He opens the refrigerator in search of a refreshment to calm his thoughts.

The light from the fridge spills onto the kitchen floor.

Jon notices a small pool of water by his feet; probably a leak.

Finally turning on the light he notices there are multiple pools of water and to his surprise and greatest fear, a pair of damp foot prints leading to the front porch.


Sound: The waves have ceased to exist in his mind; silence.


Narrator:

Against his own will, Jon makes his way to the screen door and slowly pulls it open.

His eyes are now closed for fear of seeing the two reminders of his past life.

As he stands there he feels two cold, wet, child hands wrapping around each of his.


Sound: A huge wave breaks and crashes on the shore


He opens his eyes.


-Que Vincent Price laugh


2 comments:

  1. Good job on building the tension. Just a few errors in mechanics, Samantha...(rustle and child's)

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  2. Your story really had me on the edge of my seat the whole time. I would like to have a better idea on the description of the girls. I really enjoyed the description of the man and how you put so much detail is portraying how he felt. Overall, I think that your story went above and beyond what the assignment asked for.

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